Blog Fiction

[vsfguthroth]

No game this week, so I thought I'd share a short piece of IHMN related original writing. 

It's my first ever attempt at this sort of blog entry, so I hope you like it

Pete

[Craig]

It works better if you add a link 

[vsfguthroth]

It's the same place as last time, but it was late when I posted and I forgot 

http://ihmn-east-africa.blogspot.co.uk/

Pete

[Craig]

What we writers call a 'good start' 

[Silbuster]

It's alright. The groundwork for future development is there. It's a little dense with detail though whereas it could do with something to grab the reader's attention.
Of course, that's only my opinion.

[Sven]

Got a good start going there. I hope you expand on it.

[vsfguthroth]

Thanks for the comments.

I agree I need to stretch things a little, but I think this group will appear again.